It's certainly worth a try! I'm not sure it'd work for me, personally, but I can't be sure unless I see it. (The issue I can see myself having with cutting the dialogue out is that it loses you some of the setting clues that's in it.) I don't think that, for me, it's so much an issue with what they say as much as that it's an issue that we don't know them well enough to interpret what they say how you intend it. I'd see more force in Kimmy's refusal to calm down, for example, if you ended it on an exclamation mark rather than a period. It's a ridiculously tiny thing, but it tells me she's at the very least raising her voice and that, in combination with what she's saying, strengthens my feeling that she's, indeed, not very calm right at that moment.
Awww, thank you. <3 I used to be much better at comments, though. I was less self-conscious and spent at least two hours of every day leaving them. (If there's anything you ever really want my comments on, do let me know. I daren't make promises on comments otherwise, though I'd love the opportunity, thank you! ^-^)
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Date: 2011-08-11 06:18 pm (UTC)Awww, thank you. <3 I used to be much better at comments, though. I was less self-conscious and spent at least two hours of every day leaving them. (If there's anything you ever really want my comments on, do let me know. I daren't make promises on comments otherwise, though I'd love the opportunity, thank you! ^-^)
(Also, I have a use for this icon now! YAY!)